Dammit! I actually deleted that but I must have just typed it straight back in. LOL, I do that all the time. And also, if I'm writing an essay and talking to someone at the same time, I have a tendency to add completely random words from the conversation into the essay instead of what I am actually meant to be writing. Like I'll write "shopping" instead of "sonnet" or something =P D'oh CONTINUITY WINS.
Okay, continuing review-y comment:
Teddy and Victoire make use of a stockroom. I completely flailed inwardly when I read this. Nice hook, lol!
They came crashing through the stockroom door, kissing blindly. Teddy kicked it shut, then paused for a moment; letting go of Victoire with one hand, he grasped for his wand and Imperturbed the door as quickly as he could. Again, FLAIL. For kissing and passionate!Teddy! Woooooot.
Victoire had leant over the counter, tormenting him in other, more silent ways, smirking as his hair went mental. Firstly: Oo-er! Secondly: HAIR EEEE. Nice touch.
Teddy shed them with more speed than was decent. I'm all for indecent!Teddy.
“I missed you,” she said, and kissed him. Awwwwwwww =) See, this isn't that smutty. It's all cute too!
How have you always got freckles? It’s February. Who has freckles in February Aww, it's sad that they haven't seen eachother for so long =( You should write angsty fic when they are not together and are both thinking about eachother, mhm.
She did, however, lick her lips. Ohh, Merlin. Heh, this was fun. You can just hear the groan in Teddy's mind with the "Ohh, Merlin". And she's not wasting her time, is she? Well, neither would I...=P (what? It's TEDDY, for Christ's sake!)
“Right,” said Teddy, and his voice cracked slightly. “Time for some thrilling heroics.” With what he hoped was a suitably masterful gesture, he swept one of the counters clear. I seriously love him. This is SO CUTE but also sort of REALL SEXY at the same time. I hope my S.O. (if I do manage to clinch one eventually...) sweeps a counter for me at some point. I really do.
to land atop a cage of excited Pygmy Puffs. LOL somehow I missed this part this morning.
I'm not going to quote the rest, because it could get a bit awkward really couldn't it. But I thought it was very well done, not too much or too little, just right.
Really liked the universe-exploding bit with the oxygen metaphor et al.
As their breathing slowed, Victoire leaned her forehead against his, and whispered, “Happy Valentine’s day.” AWWW THEY'RE LOVELY.
Very well done *applause*
I think I'm going to write the Teddy (and slightly Teddy/Vic, if you'll allow! I don't want to encroach on your mastered territory) fic that's been on my mind in a plotbunny-esque style ever since I did the map one. I very nearly started writing it in one of my frees today, but work got in the way =/
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LOL, I do that all the time. And also, if I'm writing an essay and talking to someone at the same time, I have a tendency to add completely random words from the conversation into the essay instead of what I am actually meant to be writing. Like I'll write "shopping" instead of "sonnet" or something =P D'oh
CONTINUITY WINS.
Okay, continuing review-y comment:
I completely flailed inwardly when I read this. Nice hook, lol!
Again, FLAIL. For kissing and passionate!Teddy! Woooooot.
Firstly: Oo-er! Secondly: HAIR EEEE. Nice touch.
I'm all for indecent!Teddy.
Awwwwwwww =) See, this isn't that smutty. It's all cute too!
Aww, it's sad that they haven't seen eachother for so long =( You should write angsty fic when they are not together and are both thinking about eachother, mhm.
Heh, this was fun. You can just hear the groan in Teddy's mind with the "Ohh, Merlin". And she's not wasting her time, is she? Well, neither would I...=P (what? It's TEDDY, for Christ's sake!)
I seriously love him. This is SO CUTE but also sort of REALL SEXY at the same time. I hope my S.O. (if I do manage to clinch one eventually...) sweeps a counter for me at some point. I really do.
LOL somehow I missed this part this morning.
I'm not going to quote the rest, because it could get a bit awkward really couldn't it. But I thought it was very well done, not too much or too little, just right.
Really liked the universe-exploding bit with the oxygen metaphor et al.
AWWW THEY'RE LOVELY.
Very well done *applause*
I think I'm going to write the Teddy (and slightly Teddy/Vic, if you'll allow! I don't want to encroach on your mastered territory) fic that's been on my mind in a plotbunny-esque style ever since I did the map one. I very nearly started writing it in one of my frees today, but work got in the way =/